Oneness in hunger

Every moment as its own?
Then would there be time?

I am not just one I
In unit of space
In unit of time
In units of living cell
I am an one

Many ones made an one
That in some perception
Has one name
And just that.

And just that?
Is there nothing in me but a name
Behind a name
Just a lump of so much many?
Just so much many with a resonance?

It’s just that
Time space living multiplicity
All points to me – the I
When I am hungry
In stomac brain and soul.

11 thoughts on “Oneness in hunger

  1. As a reader of your poetry, I can unlock much more by observing it than as a producer of poetry.

    The problem I believe you might suffer from is generally present and easily identifiable. I spoke of such problem in older posts (before you found me) namely Poetry Tips III – Constituents and Writing Aesthesis. Both of which will provide much clearer resources for you to understand this, but I will attempt nonetheless.
    Your poetry is not bad by any means, you have a palpable ability to write greatly and explore the scopes of words beyond their initial intentions, which means your talent is there, but your “metalworking” is not. When I spoke in my post concerning Minimalism and Abstractionism in Modern Poetry, your poems are examples of this (albeit not, by far, the worst or anything similar), you perhaps just constructed this idea that poetry must be highly condensed and coated in symbolical fogs.
    I’ve struggled with that before, I pushed to make my poetry so elevating, so ethereal and concealing, that it lost detachment from the actual poetic subject.
    Perhaps that’s where it bleeds engagement, even for you, the author. The fact your poetry is so inaccessible might very well create false bridges between you and who reads you.
    My only advice — and the only one that worked for me — was the one of attentive viewership. By intensive attempts at understanding poetry from different constituents allowed me to understand, by usage of outer experience, which form is best imparted when using different styles. Then, with that notion of what has come before, you can start shaping what will come after, you can start fostering your unique style and maintain more control over both older and new forms.

    This might seem restrictive to creativity, because we believe creativity is this unbound and shapeless experience where we spawn something from nothing, but that is a reaping perception. We create with the blocks laid before us, the ferment of our feelings far evades our ability to understand them fully, or transmit them fully, so there is no issue in asking for help, even help of dead ancient writers.

    Maybe, one day, you will be the one laying blocks for others. That is a reward in-and-of itself.

    I hope I wasn’t too harsh, again, this is an opinion and I truly don’t think your poetry is bad by any means, it could just use some polishing, and mine could use some too, haha. It’s a perpetual process, we must enjoy the journey of growth, otherwise we are left with little more.

    (I conjured this view from reading five of your latest compositions, might you wish for me to read more extensively or analyse some in specific instead of generally, just ask, although I have little time, I will always find some to dedicate to those who support me)

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    1. I read it. This is what I wanted. If you get time. Check out the poem My first nephew in my blog. And the morgue of my heavens.
      Mostly these are created in different mindsets.

      But on other thought. I would ask you to wait. Every time I try with a new poem. I would ask try, how nearer it goes to stimulating a reade amd also on what. On your free time I would hope you will be there with your honest cane.
      Let me know if I could help you too in any way.

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